bad path for flash
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grandsummim just going to dump everything in one post for convenience sake.
and the revised script for the last two pictures should go like this:
"This can't go on. Others fall--they were your friends, and allies--and you let it happen. you taunt him about lost troops, he brings up the roll call of your. In the quiet and the dark neither of you ask why you suffer the decent to die and yourselves to live..." ==> soon you'll both march to judgment
"One more night. Then one of you will fall. You fight like its the last time and know that it very well may be. There will be no triumph. The games are done. You two have ended your plays, the theater is closed and the curtains drawn. You wonder if you win, when you win, whether he will wish you well despite it all. And the thought makes something like pain curl in your gut."
i tried to keep it mostly close to the original script but i just got stuck on the idea of the final battle. At the end of the day a kisnemistude is still a romance so i just thought about how despite being on different sides they still must care about each other. but they know that they each have responsibilities and neither can give up on their cause. so its kind of a tragic end no matter who wins.
also just an extra note. i tried to make it look like they are aging through the pictures so its like this takes place over the course of a few sweeps.
ok I'll shut up now, just tell me if there's anything you think i should change @_@
and the revised script for the last two pictures should go like this:
"This can't go on. Others fall--they were your friends, and allies--and you let it happen. you taunt him about lost troops, he brings up the roll call of your. In the quiet and the dark neither of you ask why you suffer the decent to die and yourselves to live..." ==> soon you'll both march to judgment
"One more night. Then one of you will fall. You fight like its the last time and know that it very well may be. There will be no triumph. The games are done. You two have ended your plays, the theater is closed and the curtains drawn. You wonder if you win, when you win, whether he will wish you well despite it all. And the thought makes something like pain curl in your gut."
i tried to keep it mostly close to the original script but i just got stuck on the idea of the final battle. At the end of the day a kisnemistude is still a romance so i just thought about how despite being on different sides they still must care about each other. but they know that they each have responsibilities and neither can give up on their cause. so its kind of a tragic end no matter who wins.
also just an extra note. i tried to make it look like they are aging through the pictures so its like this takes place over the course of a few sweeps.
ok I'll shut up now, just tell me if there's anything you think i should change @_@
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Date: 2012-07-19 02:40 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2012-07-19 02:51 am (UTC)On another note, this has been a spectacularly unpleasant day for me, yet this right here has dramatically turned the day around. Thank you very much Niji. This is stunning art.
One thing:
"This can't go on. Others fall--they were your friends, and allies--and you let it happen. you taunt him about lost troops, he brings up the roll call of your. In the quiet and the dark neither of you ask why you suffer the decent to die and yourselves to live..." ==> soon you'll both march to judgment
Your I think needs to be yours?
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Date: 2012-07-19 03:09 am (UTC)im sorry to hear you were having a bad day :(
but im glad i could help!
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Date: 2012-07-19 03:44 am (UTC)But no seriously you are perf, these are amazing! I just WOW DANG awesome art.
I am going to assume everything is in the order it appears unless I am told otherwise! I will get cracking on the flash ASAP!
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Date: 2012-07-19 03:49 am (UTC)Okay I'm absolutely horrible But
Date: 2012-07-19 12:08 pm (UTC)But no everything Pi said this is incredible niji.
Re: Okay I'm absolutely horrible But
Date: 2012-07-19 02:17 pm (UTC)don't say anything.
i WOULDN'T DREAM OF SAYING ANYTHING ABOUT YOUR COLLECTION OF DELICATE SILKS AND DRAPERY. oR THE EXTREMELY TASTEFUL GROWLBEAST PRINT FAUX FUR I SEE THERE.
YOU WERE THE ONE WHO WAS ALL "EWW, NO I'M NOT PAILING WITH YOU IN A ROOM THAT SMELLS LIKE A SLAUGHTERHOUSE SOMEONE PISSED IN." you insulted my wicked paint job, and i gave you a pretty magnanimous different option. WELCOME TO THE VISITING DIGNITARY GUEST ROOM, SQUEAMISH MOTHERFUCKER. also, that's not a faux fur.
i'M SORRY FOR OFFENDING YOUR FRAGILE DECORATING SENSIBILITIES. yOU MUST HAVE ALLLLLLLLLLLLLLLL THE SEA DWELLERS CLAMORING TO VISIT.
YOUR SPEECH WAS MUCH LESS IRRITATING BEFORE YOU STARTED SEEING THAT MOTHERFUCKING WORTHLESS PIRATE. which is a real miracle. I NEVER WOULD HAVE IMAGINED THAT YOU COULD GET MORE ANNOYING, YOU MOUTHY LITTLE HERDBEAST.
hEY, sHE'S A FREEDOM FIGHTER, cLOWN MONARCH! uNLIKE SOME OF THE PEOPLE IN THIS ROOM SHE HAS INTEGRITY, aND IS A WORTHWHILE TROLL. aND SHE HAS SELF CONTROL WHEN IT COMES TO COLOR CHOICES AND DECORATING.
too bad her self control doesn't extend respecting justice. NOW IF YOU'RE DONE CRITICIZING--
tHE HAREM ROOM?
YOU MOTHERFUCKING WISH. this is the room her imperial condescension uses on her little inspection visits, you know.
... oH. ... kINKY.
THOUGHT A REBELLIOUS MOTHERFUCKER MIGHT APPRECIATE THAT.
Re: Okay I'm absolutely horrible But
Date: 2012-07-19 09:51 pm (UTC)Re: Okay I'm absolutely horrible But
Date: 2012-07-20 01:28 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2012-07-19 04:35 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2012-07-19 09:51 pm (UTC)